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原帖由 小虎快跑 于 2010-3-15 08:57 发表
I had a trip with my friends last summer. We went to see a Art exhibition.
The sun on that day looked like it wanted the earth to burn. We were so happy to got into the museum. It’s cool and quiet ...
此篇短文的优点在于:信息量大,且句式多样
可提高的方面---选词用语的适用性(drawings or pictures)、句式表达的准确性(not only..., but also...)等
在点评这篇短文时,重点复习了not only..., but also... 的用法:
1. 引用例句:如《新世纪英语》中: He is not only good at sports, but also good at his studies.
《新概念英语2》中:I not only spoke English very carefully, but very clearly as well.
2. 分析例句,并对比作品中的表达---not only..., but also... 连接2个对等的并列成分
什么样的表达是对等?什么样的表达是并列?
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经小组讨论, 修改后的短文如下:
My friends and I went to an art exhibition last summer. The sun was burning in the sky on that day, but it was cool in the Art Museum.
We were happy to get there to appreciate the pictures. All of them had won the ‘I am a little artist’ national competition. They were not only beautiful, but also full of wonderful imagination. All of us were good at art, but we were greatly amazed by the children’s imagination. When we stood in front of the pictures, we thought that we were just a mushroom.
Ever since that Art exhibition, I have begun to understand that to draw a good picture, one not only needs to paint it well, but also has to put his heart in it.
尊重原作者的表达,留用了"mushroom"一词。小组成员之一有疑问:为何用mushroom? 作者神秘地笑答:此典故源于《小王子》一书。
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